Media based on racism (“white”) and religion, (“christian”) is fraught with error and problematic. Only well thought out, over time (matured) discussions about such topics have any meaning whatsoever. Acting on emotions experienced by such topics is dangerous, dangerous to a life well lived.
Interesting Article. Company paid apprenticeships are returning to the US as are long term careers. More and more companies are now recruiting high school grads and training them for a career with their company thus either bypassing college altogether or augmenting their apprenticeship with relevant college courses. Oh yes, getting an apprenticeship is also possible for a student in, or has graduated from, college. The caveat in all this is that, somewhere along the way, the student actually learned something, high school or otherwise, relevant to the apprenticeship.
The link below takes you to the article. I’m happy to say I passed practice test. Give it go.
Most of us have heard the typical advice about writing dialogue—make sure your characters don’t all sound the same, include only what’s essential, opt for the word said over other dialogue tags, and so on. Here’s more granularity.
1. “Dialogue should stay on topic.” In real life we talk in spurts, in jumbles, in bursts and wipeouts and mumbles and murmurs and grunts as we try to formulate our thoughts. We stumble and correct ourselves. We pause and reflect. We backtrack. We wander into tangents, and then get back to the point.
It’s often said that on the page, good dialogue doesn’t do the same thing. But I disagree.
Tangents reveal character traits and priorities. If dialogue is too focused and direct, it’ll become predictable. Readers want to see the motivations, the quirks, the uniqueness of each character. The prudent use of digressions can add texture to a story.
People don’t always respond to what was said or to the questions they’re asked. They interrupt, change the subject, and attempt to stay on their pre-determined course even after the conversation has taken a turn in a different direction.
“How come it’s so hot out here?”
“It’s supposed to hit 90 today. Hey, listen, do you want some lemonade?”
“Ninety? Man, I hate this. Remind me why we left Maine in the first place.”
“Ninety’s not so bad. So, lemonade?”
Even in this brief exchange, multiple conversations are taking place. They overlap, reveal the character’s attitudes and add verisimilitude to what’s being said.
At times you’ll want your dialogue to pool off into tributaries. This doesn’t mean it’s unfocused or random, but rather that it’s layered with meaning to show the goals of the characters, the social context of the conversation and the subtext that’s present in the scene.
In fact, sometimes you’ll want your characters to discuss trivial things. Subtext brings depth to triviality.
In Hollywood there’s a saying: “The scene is not about what the scene is about.” In essence, this means that what the readers (or viewers) are witnessing on the surface is not what lies at the heart of that scene.
Scenes that are primarily about romantic tension will often have dialogue in which the characters banter or engage in small talk. But in those instances, it’s what’s going on beneath the surface that matters most. Identify the core tension of the scene, then plumb subtext and use apparent triviality to your advantage in dialogue. (Caveat: This, like many literary techniques, should be used in moderation. There’s no need to show subtext in every scene, nor should you. Chase scenes, for instance, are best approached as what you see is what you get. An attempt to layer in subtext will only become a distraction.)
Don’t be afraid of digressions. Use them to insert red herrings, foreshadow important events, reveal clues about what motivates your characters, or add new dramatic elements to the story line.
2. “Use dialogue as you would actual speech.”
Although in real life people speak primarily to impart information, in fiction a conversation is not simply a way for something to be expressed—it’s a way for something to be overcome. As you’re writing, rather than asking yourself, “What does this character need to say?” ask, “What does this character need to accomplish?”
A woman wants to confront her husband about his overspending; he wants to watch the game.
The cops are questioning a suspect; she’s being evasive.
In both of these instances, the mutually exclusive goals of the characters create tension that affects how the conversation will play out.
When determining your character’s response to stimuli, remember that his agenda toward the other person will trump the topic of conversation.
“There’s this crazy thing they invented called the Internet. You can look stuff up on it. You should check it out sometime.”
“Ah. Now, that was sarcasm, right?”
“But that was?”
“What do you think?”
She looked at me disparagingly.
Words can be barbs. They can be sabers. They can be jewels. Don’t let them be marshmallows that are just passed back and forth.
Give each character a goal. The speaker might be trying to impress the other person, or entertain her or seduce her or punish her. Whatever it is, the agenda—whether stated explicitly or not—will shape everything that’s said.
“You’re not going to tell him about us, are you?”
“He’ll find out eventually. I should be the one to—”
“No. Listen, we have something special here. Do you really want to lose it?”
“It’s not just that. I have the kids to think about. What’s best for them.”
Here, neither question is answered directly. Often you can move the story forward more effectively by having the characters respond in a way that implies an answer, showing that they’re reading between the lines of what was said or have questions of their own.
3. “Opt for the speaker attribution said over all others.”
It’s true that you’ll want to avoid cluttering your story with obtrusive speaker attributions. Having a character consistently chortle, exclaim, retort, chip in, quip and question rather than simply say anything will become a distraction. Readers will stop being present in the story and will start searching for your next synonym for said. They get it. They know you own a thesaurus. Just tell the story.
On the other hand, the use of said can become tiresome when it appears repeatedly on the same page. And, when used improperly, it can also be a giveaway that you’re an inexperienced writer.
“Bob said” does not equal “said Bob.”
To hear how your dialogue reads, try inserting the pronoun instead of the character’s name. For example:
“That’s an awesome car,” Bob said.
“That’s an awesome car,” he said.
Both of those statements make sense. But look at what happens when you write it the other way:
“That’s an awesome car,” said Bob.
“That’s an awesome car,” said he.
If you wouldn’t write “said he” then don’t write “said Bob.” Stick with placing the speaker’s name before the verb unless there’s an overwhelming contextual reason not to.
Don’t use attributions simply to indicate who’s speaking. Use them to create pauses reflected in actual speech, to characterize, and even to orchestrate the pace and movement of the scene.
“She was strangled.”
“So,” he muttered. “Another one.”
That snippet of dialogue reads much differently from:
“She was strangled.”
“So, another one,” he muttered.
Additionally, speaker attributions can be used to maintain or diminish status. Compare the two following sentences.
“Come here,” he said. “Now.”
“Come here now,” he said.
See how the placement of the speaker attribution in the first example creates a pause that emphasizes the last word while also raising the dominance of the speaker?
4. “Avoid long speeches.”
Sometimes allowing a character to have her say reveals more about her than forcing her to speak in sound bites ever could.
In this excerpt from my novel The Pawn, a teenage girl is speaking with her stepfather after her mother’s death in New York City.
“Why didn’t you ask me if I wanted to move to Denver?”
“What do you mean?”
“After Mom died. We just picked up and moved. Why didn’t you ask me if I wanted to move?”
“Well, I just thought it might be best for both of us to get some space and—”
“For both of us?”
“And how did you come to know what would be best for me?”
“We’re supposed to be a family. Families make choices together about what’s best for everyone, not just for the one in charge.”
“You took me away from all my friends. My mom dies, and you make me leave everyone I know and move across the country, and all I ever wanted was a family like Cherise has—a mom and a dad—and when Mom met you, I thought maybe it would happen, just maybe I’d finally have someone to teach me the things dads are supposed to teach their daughters—I don’t know, like about life or guys or whatever and maybe come to my volleyball games and make me do my homework when I don’t want to and tell me I’m pretty sometimes and give me a hard time about my boyfriends and take a picture of me in my prom dress and then stand by my side one day when I get married …”
“I never knew—”
“You never asked!”
The girl’s run-on response does more to show her attitude and personality than a back-and-forth exchange would. It also reveals characterization, expresses desire and provides escalation.
(Incidentally, notice how the dashes are used when a character is cut off, and ellipses when the girl’s thoughts trail off. Dashes and ellipses are not interchangeable.)
When deciding whether to let a character launch into a diatribe, consider if she’s trying to get her say in before anyone else can interrupt. Also, take into account the buildup of tension that precedes the speech. Like a garden hose, the more pressure, the more dramatic the release.
5. “Be grammatically correct.“
Always be willing to break conventions when it’s in the service of the story and the reader.
Kyle spoke before Daniel could: “So you told your dad? I mean, about the visions and everything?”
Although some editors might want to replace the colon in this example with a period, the primary issue should be how the punctuation affects the flow rather than how closely it follows a stylebook. Because the urgency of the scene has Kyle speaking quickly before Daniel has a chance to reply, a full stop would undermine that. A colon serves to better convey the scene’s uninterrupted pace.
Notice also in the above example that question marks indicate an upward inflection at the end of a sentence, not necessarily a question. So your primary concern isn’t always “Is this a question?” but “Do I want this to sound like a question?”
In dialogue, sentence fragments sound more realistic to readers than complete sentences do. Cut semicolons from dialogue. If you find them, it’s usually because you’re trying to include complex sentences that wouldn’t sound natural if they were spoken aloud. Choose commas and periods instead.
6. “Show what the characters are doing while they’re talking.”
Too often this results in on-the-nose writing and an overemphasis on the minutia of body language. If you find your character brushing his nose or repositioning his chair or crossing his legs and so forth for no other reason than to provide a respite from the dialogue, recast the scene.
Just as dialogue should reveal the intention of the characters, so should the actions that they take while they’re speaking. When we read that a character folded his arms, we’ll naturally wonder why he’s doing that. What is it meant to convey about his attitude or emotional response to what’s happening? Don’t confuse your readers by inserting needless movement. Rather, include action only as long as it adds to the scene or enriches it. If the action doesn’t convey anything essential, drop it.
7. “Keep characters’ speech consistent.”
I used to agree with this until one day I overheard a man in his late 20s talking on his cell phone in a hotel lobby. After a moment or two it became clear that he was a lawyer and was speaking with a client. He was articulate, spoke in complex sentences and sounded well versed in legal terminology.
A few moments later he received a call that was obviously from an old college buddy. Suddenly, his entire demeanor changed. He was joking around and talking more like a frat brother than a law school grad.
If those two conversations appeared in a book they would sound as if they came from two entirely different characters. That man’s history with those people affected his tone, word choice, grammar, sentence structure, use of idioms, everything. Even his posture changed.
Dialogue needs to be honest for each character in that situation. Don’t try to make your characters consistent in the sense of always sounding the same, but rather allow them to remain in character within each unique social context.
So, if a character is highly educated and every time she speaks she’s using impressive words, it’ll get old. She’ll seem one-dimensional. Or if she’s from the South and you have her saying “y’all” all the time she’ll become cliched.
Few people are always blunt, always angry, always helpful. We speak differently in different situations. Mood, goals, state of mind fluctuate. This ties in with character believability. Remember: status, context, intention.
Give characters a goal, a history and an attitude toward the other people in the conversation. And always strive for honest, believable responses rather than canned ones.
From Writers Digest
Know when we are at rest in our labor, we are doing god’s work.
The bubble has burst. Looks like we’ve turned the corner on media’s demonization of Trump. Like the stages of death, first denial, then acceptance. I’m seeing more dialogue from Media, and personal discussions, about the whole person, versus lop-sided shit to boost media ratings. I think the guy is not so much an ass, as he is person who wants to be a hero, a person who wants to fix many things that are broken in this country.
Do I disagree with him on many things – sure, but I also think open disagreement makes our country stronger.
I’m hopeful TrumpCare will advance Obamacare. I’m hopeful he will improve the education system. I’m hopeful he will improve our standard of living. I’m hopeful he will make those who made it into to the US citizens and leave planned-parenthood the fuck alone! And most of all, I pray he keeps his fingers off the Goddamn nukes!
Oh yes, for those marching on inauguration day, if you don’t like something, make sure you include a campaign for change in your protest, otherwise you’re just preaching to the choir.
So much more… Friends, I would love to hear your thoughts.
A few days ago, we drove south from Nevada on Hwy 395 toward Los Angeles along the eastern Sierras. We drove in warm comfort for several hours on an near-arrow-straight bumpless road staring in awe at 2km high granite walls and 4km high snow-glacier covered peaks to the west and high desert mountains topped with Bristlecone pines to the east making this one of the most enchanted drives on the planet. If you haven’t done this drive, I highly recommend.